This poem consists of longer lines. It uses stanzas with three lines then a break. Sentences carry from stanza to stanza. Except the first one. It pushes the reader to the next stanza.
It's story is told presently. I believe by an older person. They are more telling a story then giving you a lot of imagery. Except when he describes his mother's love like being a cloud. "large, hovering, and close, but not too easy to touch, hiding lightning but just as often dissipating into empty dark."
There are lots of "o" sounds through out the poem. For example: "above broken clouds" and "on our roof." There were a few similies as well: "which we sat this morning like marionettes," "you and I like strangers again," "my room-invading mother whose love was like a cloud," and "slate and stone sunk deep in mystery, like what bound us together and supported us."
The lines in this poem are of a longer nature, however this doesn't seem to hinder the poem in anyway. Senctences seem to spill from one line to the next and in some cases into different stanzas. This poems is composed of three line stanzas. There are a lot of "o" sounds withing this poem. This poem contains simile. "my room-invading mother whose love was like a cloud-" is one example of simile within the poem.
I noticed the repeating “o” sounds as well. The first words of every line weren’t capitalized and the short lines flowed into each other. The poem has a story in it and imagery helps depict the two characters in the middle of a situation. The similes aid the writer in explaining the actions and appearances of the characters. "like marionettes whose strings are loose but not necessarily undone."
I noticed a few similes like “whose love was like a cloud” as well as the one about marionettes. The poem goes from line to line, but is more abstract than a simple story. There is pattern in the poem. Rhodes talks about above and then beneath, and then continues to talk about the next below or beneath thing. I too noticed the overwhelming presence of “O’s”. There are many double “O” words. There is more than one spot in the poem that has the repetition of the “F” sound. The same for “M” sounds. Rhodes used three lines to a stanza and kept a rather steady pace.
I thought that the poem was interesting. I thought the line breaks were different in the middle of the sentences. I enjoyed the imagery in the poem especially the footings and basement description at the end. I didn't really understand the whole meaning of the poem but maybe fro the other student's comments I will understand more.
I thought that the imagery in this poem was put together very well. The use of switching views from above to below throughout the poem is a mesmerizing theme. I also noticed a repeating consonance with the letter b," Below the roof, our bedroom and the bed". The consonance and other repetitions throughout aided the musical flow of the poem immensely.
The poem is definitely drawn out, as evidenced by the longer than normal lines. The first few lines of the poem seemed conversational and almost too casual to take as seriously as I think the author intended. It evolves lyrically and musically as the poem progresses and the repeated vowel sounds, most "o" sounds and also some repeating consonant sounds fit very nicely into the poem and it didn't seem like they were forced into place, the flow was definitely there. The imagery created through some similes and metaphors was effective, especially the marionette image.
The poem had longer stanzas, which I liked. It also used similes which helped me make more sense of the poem. The imagery also helped me when I was trying to make sense of the poem. It helped show what the author was talking about. There was also the repetition of the "o" sound. The poem also seemed to flow.
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This poem consists of longer lines. It uses stanzas with three lines then a break. Sentences carry from stanza to stanza. Except the first one. It pushes the reader to the next stanza.
It's story is told presently. I believe by an older person. They are more telling a story then giving you a lot of imagery. Except when he describes his mother's love like being a cloud. "large, hovering, and close, but not too easy to touch, hiding lightning but just as often dissipating into empty dark."
There are lots of "o" sounds through out the poem. For example: "above broken clouds" and "on our roof." There were a few similies as well: "which we sat this morning like marionettes," "you and I like strangers again," "my room-invading mother whose love was like a cloud," and "slate and stone sunk deep in mystery, like what bound us together and supported us."
The lines in this poem are of a longer nature, however this doesn't seem to hinder the poem in anyway. Senctences seem to spill from one line to the next and in some cases into different stanzas. This poems is composed of three line stanzas. There are a lot of "o" sounds withing this poem. This poem contains simile. "my room-invading mother whose love was like a cloud-" is one example of simile within the poem.
I noticed the repeating “o” sounds as well. The first words of every line weren’t capitalized and the short lines flowed into each other. The poem has a story in it and imagery helps depict the two characters in the middle of a situation. The similes aid the writer in explaining the actions and appearances of the characters. "like marionettes whose strings are loose but not necessarily undone."
I noticed a few similes like “whose love was like a cloud” as well as the one about marionettes. The poem goes from line to line, but is more abstract than a simple story. There is pattern in the poem. Rhodes talks about above and then beneath, and then continues to talk about the next below or beneath thing. I too noticed the overwhelming presence of “O’s”. There are many double “O” words. There is more than one spot in the poem that has the repetition of the “F” sound. The same for “M” sounds. Rhodes used three lines to a stanza and kept a rather steady pace.
I thought that the poem was interesting. I thought the line breaks were different in the middle of the sentences. I enjoyed the imagery in the poem especially the footings and basement description at the end. I didn't really understand the whole meaning of the poem but maybe fro the other student's comments I will understand more.
I thought that the imagery in this poem was put together very well. The use of switching views from above to below throughout the poem is a mesmerizing theme. I also noticed a repeating consonance with the letter b," Below the roof, our bedroom and the bed". The consonance and other repetitions throughout aided the musical flow of the poem immensely.
The poem is definitely drawn out, as evidenced by the longer than normal lines. The first few lines of the poem seemed conversational and almost too casual to take as seriously as I think the author intended. It evolves lyrically and musically as the poem progresses and the repeated vowel sounds, most "o" sounds and also some repeating consonant sounds fit very nicely into the poem and it didn't seem like they were forced into place, the flow was definitely there. The imagery created through some similes and metaphors was effective, especially the marionette image.
The poem had longer stanzas, which I liked. It also used similes which helped me make more sense of the poem. The imagery also helped me when I was trying to make sense of the poem. It helped show what the author was talking about. There was also the repetition of the "o" sound. The poem also seemed to flow.
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